{"id":2760,"date":"2008-07-21T08:37:29","date_gmt":"2008-07-21T08:37:29","guid":{"rendered":"http:\/\/scienceblogs.com\/principles\/2008\/07\/21\/book-report-second-draft-first\/"},"modified":"2008-07-21T08:37:29","modified_gmt":"2008-07-21T08:37:29","slug":"book-report-second-draft-first","status":"publish","type":"post","link":"http:\/\/chadorzel.com\/principles\/2008\/07\/21\/book-report-second-draft-first\/","title":{"rendered":"Book Report:  Second Draft, First Pass"},"content":{"rendered":"<p>I&#8217;ve finished a first pass through the second draft of <cite>Bunnies Made of Cheese: The Book<\/cite>, doing revisions on all of the chapters to make it a little more comprehensible. I&#8217;m still waiting for beta-reader comments on the re-written Chapter 8 (hint, hint), but other than that, I&#8217;m going through doing consistency checks (&#8220;Didn&#8217;t I say the same exact thing in Chapter 3?&#8221;), tightening up occasional sentences (I have a tendency to overuse phrases like &#8220;because of the fact that,&#8221; which is four words too long), and identifying a few issues with figures.<\/p>\n<p>The clunky splint on my left hand makes this oh, so much more fun than it might otherwise be.  Actually, it would probably suck regardless&#8211; I keep finding that I&#8217;ve just skimmed over three pages without marking anything, because I can remember what I wanted it to say, and stop reading what&#8217;s actually on the page. Good copy editors aren&#8217;t paid nearly enough.<\/p>\n<p>My deadline is next Friday, so I should have time to fix all the little mistakes, even with the splint slowing my typing, and maybe even do another pass to fix the errors introduced in the editing process (if FutureBaby holds on that long). If I get done in time, I can go for the ultimate in cat-vacuuming, and insert cute dog pictures for each chapter, though that sort of thing is undoubtedly best left to professional production people.<\/p>\n<p>Page count on the current draft (which I had printed at Staples so I can mark it up on paper) is 262 (one of those is the table of contents). Current word count is 67,987&#8211; for those playing at home, the contract calls for 40,000 words so that&#8217;s, um, a bit over. I&#8217;m not sure what&#8217;s going to happen with that.<\/p>\n<p>The current table of contents (now with cute chapter titles!) is below the fold.<\/p>\n<p><!--more--><\/p>\n<ul>\n<li>Introduction<br \/>\nWhy Talk to Your Dog About Physics?: Introduction to Quantum Physics\t1<\/li>\n<li>Chapter 1:<br \/>\nWhich Way? Both Ways: Particle-Wave Duality\t10<\/li>\n<li>Chapter 2:<br \/>\nWhere&#8217;s My Bone?: The Heisenberg Uncertainty Principle\t37<\/li>\n<li>Chapter 3:<br \/>\nSchr\u00c3\u00b6dinger&#8217;s Dog: The Copenhagen Interpretation\t61<\/li>\n<li>Chapter 4:<br \/>\nMany Worlds, Many Treats: The Many-Worlds Interpretation\t84<\/li>\n<li>Chapter 5:<br \/>\nAre We There Yet?: The Quantum Zeno Effect\t109<\/li>\n<li>Chapter 6:<br \/>\nNo Digging Required: Quantum Tunneling\t124<\/li>\n<li>Chapter 7:<br \/>\nSpooky Barking at a Distance: Quantum Entanglement\t146<\/li>\n<li>Chapter 8:<br \/>\nBeam Me a Bunny: Quantum Teleportation\t174<\/li>\n<li>Chapter 9:<br \/>\nBunnies Made of Cheese: Virtual Particles and Quantum Electro-Dynamics\t198<\/li>\n<li>Chapter 10:<br \/>\nEvil Squirrels with Goatees: The Physics of Extra Dimensions\t223<\/li>\n<li>Chapter 11:<br \/>\nBeware of Evil Squirrels: The Mis-use of Quantum Physics\t244<\/li>\n<\/ul>\n<p>These are single-column space-and-a-half pages in Word, with figures and tables, so don&#8217;t go freaking out over the idea of 31 pages on entanglement&#8211; the text density is not all that high. I don&#8217;t feel like going through to do individual chapter wordcounts at this point, but they&#8217;re all very roughly the same length.<\/p>\n<p>If you&#8217;ve been following along for a while now, you may notice that Chapters 9 and 10 flipped order&#8211; I decided that they made more sense this way. Actually, there&#8217;s a non-trivial chance that Chapter 10 will drop out of the book entirely&#8211; it&#8217;s not a great fit with the rest of the material, and as previously noted, the current draft is way too long. It&#8217;d be a shame to lose it&#8211; I&#8217;m inordinately fond of the opening dialogue&#8211; but it may end up as a website extra or some such.<\/p>\n<p>Speaking of which, Kate and I now own the domain names &#8220;chadorzel.com&#8221; and &#8220;bunniesmadeofcheese.com.&#8221; They currently redirect to this blog, but at some point, I&#8217;ll play around with setting up real promotional pages. That seems like ideal between-diaper-changes material to me&#8230;<\/p>\n<p>And now I really need to get moving.<\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"<p>I&#8217;ve finished a first pass through the second draft of Bunnies Made of Cheese: The Book, doing revisions on all of the chapters to make it a little more comprehensible. I&#8217;m still waiting for beta-reader comments on the re-written Chapter 8 (hint, hint), but other than that, I&#8217;m going through doing consistency checks (&#8220;Didn&#8217;t I&hellip; <a class=\"more-link\" href=\"http:\/\/chadorzel.com\/principles\/2008\/07\/21\/book-report-second-draft-first\/\">Continue reading <span class=\"screen-reader-text\">Book Report:  Second Draft, First Pass<\/span><\/a><\/p>\n","protected":false},"author":2,"featured_media":0,"comment_status":"open","ping_status":"1","sticky":false,"template":"","format":"standard","meta":{"footnotes":""},"categories":[68],"tags":[],"class_list":["post-2760","post","type-post","status-publish","format-standard","hentry","category-progress_report","entry"],"_links":{"self":[{"href":"http:\/\/chadorzel.com\/principles\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/2760","targetHints":{"allow":["GET"]}}],"collection":[{"href":"http:\/\/chadorzel.com\/principles\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts"}],"about":[{"href":"http:\/\/chadorzel.com\/principles\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/types\/post"}],"author":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"http:\/\/chadorzel.com\/principles\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/users\/2"}],"replies":[{"embeddable":true,"href":"http:\/\/chadorzel.com\/principles\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/comments?post=2760"}],"version-history":[{"count":0,"href":"http:\/\/chadorzel.com\/principles\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/posts\/2760\/revisions"}],"wp:attachment":[{"href":"http:\/\/chadorzel.com\/principles\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/media?parent=2760"}],"wp:term":[{"taxonomy":"category","embeddable":true,"href":"http:\/\/chadorzel.com\/principles\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/categories?post=2760"},{"taxonomy":"post_tag","embeddable":true,"href":"http:\/\/chadorzel.com\/principles\/wp-json\/wp\/v2\/tags?post=2760"}],"curies":[{"name":"wp","href":"https:\/\/api.w.org\/{rel}","templated":true}]}}